Entrapped—
the coldness slumbers
behind the gates of brass,
and the breath of my nostrils
kindles
the summer air —
my heart ignites into bonfires
upon the saffron
grains of sand,
my flesh is flush with the radiant
crimson of the berries —
the season of warmth
has come.
by D. G. Vachal © 2013
** image by Wikimedia Commons
Great post thanks for sharing and congrats on being Freshly Pressed!
Thank you so much, I was not aware of my post being Freshly Pressed. Thanks for letting me know!
Magnificent comparison and summertime beauty ! Bravo dear!
Thank you, Deb. Your comments are uplifting. All my best, Dee
Loved the second paragraph which ignited great passion. Beauty. 🙂
Thank you, Manu. It’s wonderful to know you read the passion in the second paragraph. Best wishes, Dee
Your poetry is beautiful, and inspirational. I love the scripture too, at the top.
Thank you, Joyce. The scripture header on my blog is a great inspiration for me to write. Thank you for stopping by to visit! Blessings, Dee
The season of warmth – full of life, hope and love, Dee.
All good wishes,
Eric
P/s You’ve been gone for some time – and happy to have you back 🙂
Thank you, Eric. Yes, I have been away for a while, quite inundated with numbers work at the moment, but hope to catch up. Peace, Dee
Very nice … its summer time
Thank you, Juneth dear. Love, Dee
wonderful! it´s amazing how warmth enters the body, how it stays. what a gift from the God of all creation. love you!
Yes, Lorna. Warmth and life indeed go hand in hand. The God of all creation does bestow upon us wondrous gifts! Love you too! Dee
Enjoyed as always! Good imagery
And sentiment!!
Consider dropping “and” in 4th sentence
(May avoid the “mental stop”). I am definitely
Not “correcting” but I have been chopping my
Verses recently because of a friend’s advice.
You have a gift with deep emotional impact
With relevance! Keep sharing!
Thank you, John! What a great suggestion — I think dropping “and” in the 4th sentence makes the poem read smoothly. So true, the “mental stop” occurred with the “and”. I so appreciate your comments and I always welcome the ways of improvement. In the midst of deadlines, and on my way to my computer to do statistical programming, suddenly an inner voice stopped me, and I heard the words of this poem, and jotted them down, found an image, and uploaded both, in a span of 20 minutes. That is how this poem was born. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment! BTW I don’t know if you have a blog I can visit. If you do, please let me know the link to your blog. All good wishes, Dee
My poetry site
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Johnkul007.com
Great reading your creations!
Thank you for the link, John. I look forward to reading your creations! Dee
Thank you, John! What a great suggestion — I think dropping “and” in the 4th sentence makes the poem read smoothly. So true, the “mental stop” occurred with the “and”. I so appreciate your comments and I always welcome the ways of improvement. In the midst of deadlines, and on my way to my computer to do statistical programming, suddenly an inner voice stopped me, and I heard the words of this poem, and jotted them down, found an image, and uploaded both, in a span of 20 minutes. That is how this poem was born. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment! BTW I don’t know if you have a blog I can visit. If you do, please let me know the link to your blog. All good wishes, Dee
O, Dee, this piece fills my senses. I breathe and the berries become a part of me (and I, a part of them). How beautiful the soul that can speak of such wonder by heart. Thank you for the lovely that is you. My love always, Bobbie
How lovely your thoughts on this post, Bobbie. I love how you describe being one with the berries, and how this piece fills your senses. It brings me utter delight. Love always, Dee
Dee I love your poem…so very refreshingly wonderful! Hugs and blessings!
Oh thank you so much, Wendell! I am thrilled to know you found this poem refreshingly wonderful. Hugs and blessings to you, too ! Dee